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Lit Contest Entry by *Whomey:iconWhomey:



The many lives taken and the many souls that have breaking from the force we call God. The innocent are raped and the weak are stomped on. We all look to blame something higher then us. Some give this force trust, others cling to disbelief of how some force called god can let this grief stay. There's no meaning or logic we can reason with, to understand god's "Plan". What plan is it? What could possibly be the main goal of all our work, hardship, and souls?

Then again, is it our fault? Do we blame god? No it's our own fucking fault. We brought our own peace and lives to a halt. We are the razor blades on the wrist of man kinds dying body and soul. We were given a gift and we torn it apart in from of gods eyes. Now it's his turn to cry. Not for us, not one fucking bit, for his own mistake. Now we just sit and wait for this pain and hate to corrode us. We will ask for his mercy and he will say "No".
©2009 *Whomey
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Just a Contest Entry.

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:icongwenavhyeuranastasia:
Thanks for your entry. Can you go into edit deviation and put it in the prose category though? It's more prose than poetry.

As promised, just pointing out your typos:

There's no meaning or logic we can reason with, to understand gods "Plan" Should be "god's".

Last line of first paragraph. Should be "our work", not "are".

No it's are own fucking fault. Again, should be "our" not "are".

That's all I can point out. Thanks for the entry. :]

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:iconwhomey:
Ok thanks I took care of those problems. One Question do you want me to note GwenavhyeurAnastasia with this since you said it's more of a prose?

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:icongwenavhyeuranastasia:
Aha, good. And I am Gwen, dear. :P ~Amertie forwarded your note to me.

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:icondiablong-buang:
Reminds me of "In the Name of God" by Dream Theater. Man, the things people do. :shakefist: And some god is blamed for all of this, while I think it's just people being heartless.

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Don't look ahead, just run to me
Each step will find the next one, recklessly
We'll find ourselves on the safest ledge
Well pardon me, I couldn't help myself
-- Copeland - On the Safest Ledge --

*Letters-Words-Write ~writeaway
:iconwhomey:
Ok.

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:iconwhomey:
Thanks blaming someone else always makes people feel better.

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